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Read the paragraph.

(1) As I absorbed the many emotions surrounding me, I felt a wave of pride wash over me. (2) We had done our best and had valiantly fought. (3) Although we had lost, everyone filed out of the bleachers with their heads held high and a good feeling in their hearts.

Which revision would best improve this paragraph?
A. Delete sentence 4 from the paragraph.
B. Add the sentence, "We led most of the game."
C. Combine sentence 1 and sentence 2.
D. Replace "good" with "warm" in sentence 4.



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Final answer:

Combining sentence 1 and sentence 2 will improve the paragraph's flow and connection between emotions and actions.


Explanation:

The revision that would best improve this paragraph is to combine sentence 1 and sentence 2. This would create a smoother flow and connect the emotions and actions more effectively.

By merging these two sentences, the paragraph would read: 'As I absorbed the many emotions surrounding me, I felt a wave of pride wash over me as we had done our best and had vailantly fought for phenomenal.'

Deleting sentence 4 or adding the sentence 'We led most of the game' would not enhance the paragraph's clarity or coherence.


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