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Read the paragraph.

(1) As we walked into the coffee shop, Sunil stopped and grabbed my arm. (2) There hung a brand-new poster for the annual Battle of the Bands. (3) The entrance fee was $50—just a little more than what we earned selling the action figures! (4) We knew the rest of the band would all be in agreement: It was time to put that money to use.

Which revision makes one of the sentences more concise?

A. Sentence 1: Delete the phrase "and grabbed my arm."
B. Sentence 2: Change "there" to "in the window."
C. Sentence 3: Change "just a little more than" to "a few dollars more than."
D. Sentence 4: Change "be in agreement" to "agree."



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Final answer:

To make the paragraph more concise, delete 'and grabbed my arm' from sentence 1 and change 'be in agreement' to 'agree' in sentence 4.


Explanation:

Revision:

  1. Sentence 1: Delete the phrase 'and grabbed my arm.'
  2. Sentence 4: Change 'be in agreement' to 'agree.'

Example: Sentence 1 revised as 'As we walked into the coffee shop, Sunil stopped.' Sentence 4 revised as 'We knew the rest of the band would all agree: It was time to put that money to use.'

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